Don't you just love it when your first comment is pointing out mistakes? ^_^;;
"Girls grow faster than girls, that's all." <- I think that's supposed to be "boys" instead of the second "girls."
"You'll be my little string bean, who'll grow up big and take of your mama, right?" <- Missing a "care"
...Ed had found himself face-to-face with that unexpected stubbornness quite a bit, and he knew the expression as as any Al had once had. <- Missing a "well"
I really liked these three. Especially the last one, between Ed and Al. The dynamics between them are so complex in the series it's always nice to see an author handle them well. I hope you don't mind me pointing out the mistakes.
Mistakes
"Girls grow faster than girls, that's all." <- I think that's supposed to be "boys" instead of the second "girls."
"You'll be my little string bean, who'll grow up big and take of your mama, right?" <- Missing a "care"
...Ed had found himself face-to-face with that unexpected stubbornness quite a bit, and he knew the expression as as any Al had once had. <- Missing a "well"
I really liked these three. Especially the last one, between Ed and Al. The dynamics between them are so complex in the series it's always nice to see an author handle them well. I hope you don't mind me pointing out the mistakes.