fuyu: (a brighter heart)
Lyssie ([personal profile] fuyu) wrote in [personal profile] nekokoban 2006-08-23 05:25 am (UTC)

*keyboardmash*

aieeeee. This - this - oh. Riku's tension about Alex and things, Kairi being the moderating influence and Riku kidnapping her and, and. This is a really sweet study of how two out of the three work together, and of how Riku and Kairi work together, and the sex is lovely and I love Kairi contrasting him and Sora and the end, with Riku-at-ease, made me squee.

So. Much. Love.

You've got a few tense switches happening, though, mostly in the sex, and a few weird sentences - I think you have an exta 'like' in the first sentence, for instance. But overall, lovely writing as usual. :D

♥♥♥♥♥

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