aieeeee. This - this - oh. Riku's tension about Alex and things, Kairi being the moderating influence and Riku kidnapping her and, and. This is a really sweet study of how two out of the three work together, and of how Riku and Kairi work together, and the sex is lovely and I love Kairi contrasting him and Sora and the end, with Riku-at-ease, made me squee.
So. Much. Love.
You've got a few tense switches happening, though, mostly in the sex, and a few weird sentences - I think you have an exta 'like' in the first sentence, for instance. But overall, lovely writing as usual. :D
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aieeeee. This - this - oh. Riku's tension about Alex and things, Kairi being the moderating influence and Riku kidnapping her and, and. This is a really sweet study of how two out of the three work together, and of how Riku and Kairi work together, and the sex is lovely and I love Kairi contrasting him and Sora and the end, with Riku-at-ease, made me squee.
So. Much. Love.
You've got a few tense switches happening, though, mostly in the sex, and a few weird sentences - I think you have an exta 'like' in the first sentence, for instance. But overall, lovely writing as usual. :D
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