Picky is good! I only sulk a little bit when you're being picky. :Db (You are also totally finding all the spots where I wrote and rewrote and shrieked at and rewrote again, hence some of the awkwardness -- not an excuse, just an explanation. XD) I can definitely fix up some of the repetitive lines (I know I have a problem with that in general, haha), and will try to be more careful of them in the future! :D
--as for the bit with Sen and Roy, that's just kind of how they are, in my head. No matter how dangerous or tense the situation, if she feels the need to pick on him, he always goes along with it, no matter what. I imagine that Ken is TRYING to get their attention the whole time (either that, or kind of shocked in that "so what DO I even say to this?!" way) and is being ignored. ... which is actually kind of normal, for him. From her, at least. XD
Elizabeth was surprisingly fun, and a lot more steely than I gave her credit for. ALSO I FIGURED OUT HOW TO MAKE HER MORE IMPORTANT TO THE STORY after she just sort of. Wrote herself in, go me! :Db
I'm really looking forward to the girls-day-out scene, when I get there. :|b
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--as for the bit with Sen and Roy, that's just kind of how they are, in my head. No matter how dangerous or tense the situation, if she feels the need to pick on him, he always goes along with it, no matter what. I imagine that Ken is TRYING to get their attention the whole time (either that, or kind of shocked in that "so what DO I even say to this?!" way) and is being ignored. ... which is actually kind of normal, for him. From her, at least. XD
Elizabeth was surprisingly fun, and a lot more steely than I gave her credit for. ALSO I FIGURED OUT HOW TO MAKE HER MORE IMPORTANT TO THE STORY after she just sort of. Wrote herself in, go me! :Db
I'm really looking forward to the girls-day-out scene, when I get there. :|b